feedback for feedback

my first piece was performed on wed. and went relatively well .
although it was the end of class and the feedback was minimal it was still constructive.
-the first comment was that it sounded very jazzy - even though i wasnt necessarily going for that approach it just goes to prove that if you take a bass for a walk people will immediately be reminded of jazz.
-the second comment was that it sounds somewhat tonal - all chords and basslines were based on my atonal chord progression, in respect to the bass you can walk pretty much any series of notes and have it sound quite tonal-depending on what it is being played along to.
-the third was a comment on the rhythms - the overall rhythmic scheme was quite simple and along with the jazz sounding comment i think my revisions will have a focus on more complex and interesting beat patterns.
-the last comment was on the role of the bass as the accomp. - I was trying to get an equal division between piano/bass as solo/accomp. but it is difficult to make pizz bass predominent. i included some arco markings at the end of my second piece when the bass plays the main melody, this will foreshadow the bass as the dominent solo instrument of my third piece
i'm currently in the final draft of my second piece and quite pleased with it, i'm looking forward to hearing it performed on real instruments.
cheers

Time to move on

On Monday I officially declared my 1st piece complete by handing a copy of the score to Mike. It will be performed during tomorrows class, it is written for bass and piano. I will comment on comments later this week.
Now with one complete piece I believe its time to move on to the next, I'm not sure what the mood/emotion it will take but I did think up a theme inspired by an interval - atonal western??

Week 1 - chord prog.

Since I didnt blog about week 1's chord progression I'll see no harm in doing so now.
Comment made about my prog. were the following:
-it has a gradual increase until about chord 4(of 12 chords) then plateaus until approx. chord 10
>need to increase tension of chords 6 through 8
-could use more gradual increase and peak
-needs more taper from chord 9/10 to 12
-octave doubling is not recommended in this weeks project

fine tuning, cont'd

An early version of my piece was played in class today(thanks to Mike), there are two things I'll need to work on:
1-re-voice chords that are used more than once(as commented by Clark Ross), and
2-re-notate the piano score(Mike did a great job at sight reading but the rhythms weren't as I intended them to be).
looking forward to hearing the other works later this week.

fine tuning

arranging the chord progression is in its first draft, since I'm terrible at piano I'm using Finale for the playback option(and clear notation).
I'm experimenting with time signatures that I normally wouldn't use and alternating each few bars, I haven't yet created that "timeless" effect but stumbled on some pretty interesting ideas.
Still debating on what solo instrument to write for, I figure I'll worry about that when need be, until then I'm enjoying fine tuning my chord progression and seeing/hearing what character will evolve from it.

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